Can someone make my article better (easy 10 marks)?
Discount Medical Scrubs
This is an article i have to do, can someone read it and make it better
An air raid was sent to demolish the city of Los Angeles California. The air raid took place on February thirteen around four thirty in the morning, and lasting about ten to fifteen minutes, in those ten fifteen minutes thousands of people were killed. Statistically, no one was expected to survive the raid; however the Army Survival Unit found nine people alive in Los Angeles, who was taken to a check point, where they were given a scrub down treatment, medical checks for radiation sickness, and clean cloths and food. Our reporter Sharon Lee had the opportunity of interviewing one of the survivors, Brad and Shelly Armstrong. Mr. and Mrs. Armstrong said “This was hard time for my family and me; I guess god was good to us that we survived the raid, know we can live our lives, I hope that the people of Los Angeles who were unfortunate to survive the attack would rest in peace. Lastly all of us that survived would like to thank the government for supporting and taking care of us in our time of need.” It was clear understanding that the enemy expected to attack Los Angeles, as result it would gain an upper advantage over United States in the war. However due to this action a truce was declared between the two Nations and the war ended on February fifteen.
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January 7th, 2011 at 5:19 pm
That’s not an article – it’s a short story.
The enemy fired missiles whose target was the city of Los Angeles. The attack took place on February thirteen around 4.30am and lasted little more than fifteen minutes, in those fifteen minutes hundreds of thousands of people died. No one was expected to survive but Army Survival Units have so far rescued nine people from the wreckage.
Those survivors were taken to a check point, where they were given decontamination treatment, medical checks for radiation sickness, clean clothes and food.
Sharon Lee, a reporter had the opportunity of interviewing two of the survivors, Brad and Shelly Armstrong. Mr Armstrong said “This was hard time for our family and me; I guess God was good to us in that we survived the raid, and know we can live our lives, I hope that those who did not survive the attack will rest in peace". Mrs Armstrong added "All of us would like to thank the government for rescuing us and taking care of us in our time of need.”
Although the US had expected the attack on Los Angeles, which the enemy thought would give them an advantage in the war it was far worse than envisoned.
Due to the terrible death toll of the attack the US declared a truce and a peace treaty ending the war was signed in Washington on February fifteen.
January 7th, 2011 at 5:19 pm
That ‘rejected’ guy is pretty good, ain’t he!!!!!!!